那么滿分作文到底長什么樣子呢？自己和滿分作文之間的差距又是什么呢？在最新版《托福官方指南第六版》中，給出了的全新例題和參考范文。為同學(xué)們整理了被ETS官方評為High-Level的獨立寫作范文，讓我們一起學(xué)習(xí)一下優(yōu)秀范文~

獨立寫作題目：

Do you agree or disagree with the followin statement?

Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.

High-Level Response：

In my opinion,students are more influenced by their friends rather than their teachers.Therefore,I disagree with the statement"Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends."

I do not disagree with the fact that students get influenced by their teachers,however,I believe that this"influence"is mostly within the field of academics.In most cases,the only time that students communicate with the teacher is in the school building,in the classroom.Most of the discussions are about topics related to studies.However,with friends,students often tend to discuss a variety of topics,such as studies,friends,relationships,and families.Therefore,students are generally influenced more broadly by their friends,while the only influence made by the teachers are mostly academical.

The amount of time spent with the teacher or friend,also effect on how much influence has been made to a person.As mentioned previously,the time that students communicate with the teachers is restricted to school hours.However,students spend or communicate with their friends not only in school but even outside the school campus and school hours.Especially with the emerging technology,and the development of mobile phones and the internet,students are now able to communicate with their friends at any time where ever they are.Since the amount of time spent communicating with their friends are much larger than the time spent with the teachers,there are more chance of the students being influenced by their friends rather than their teachers.

Also,it is normal that the students feel psychologically more attached to the people in their age group,especially with their friends.The teachers are usually from different generations from the students and this may cause the students to feel that there is a distance between how they think/feel and how the teachers think/feel.Since the students are more emotionally and psychologically attached to their friends,they feel more comfortable to discuss their issues with them and accept their responses more openly and easily.This fact relates directly to how much they are influenced by their friends.

For these reasons,I believe that students are more influenced by their friends than by their teachers.

在這篇參考范文的前面，標(biāo)注了這篇文章屬于High-Level Response.而根據(jù)官方文件，High Level對應(yīng)具體分數(shù)的范圍是（25-30分）。

官方評語：“This essay earns a high score.It does an excellent job in terms of topic development and organization.”這篇文章得了高分，它在文段展開和結(jié)構(gòu)方面做的非常優(yōu)秀。

加拿大語言考試托福寫作如何上30分

具體分析：這道題是一個包含對比的現(xiàn)象題型。文章是典型的5段式，開頭段+主體段*3+結(jié)尾段。作者找了3個對比點，從“影響的領(lǐng)域”“在一起的時間”和“心理傾向”，在每一段就進行了"老師"和"朋友"的對比。每個主體段都用到了不同的邏輯展開的方式。

一.開頭段：

In my opinion,students are more influenced by their friends rather than their teachers.Therefore,I disagree with the statement'Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends'.

很簡單，很直接地陳述作者自己的觀點。并不影響得分。為寫開頭段苦惱的同學(xué)，完全可以模仿這種寫法。

二.主體段①：讓步反段

I do not disagree with the fact that students get influenced by their teachers,however,I believe that this"influence"is mostly within the field of academics.I do not disagree with the fact that students get influenced by their teachers,however,I believe that this"influence"is mostly within the field of academics.

先承認，學(xué)生確實會被老師影響。但是，主要是在”academics“學(xué)術(shù)領(lǐng)域。簡單展開后，和朋友對比。在此之外，學(xué)生們更愿意跟朋友談?wù)摳鄻拥脑掝}。

三.主體段②：列舉

The amount of time spent with the teacher or friend,also effect on how much influence has been made to a person....However,students spend or communicate with their friends not only in school but even outside the school campus and school hours.

第2個比較點，學(xué)生跟老師交流的時間有限。但是跟朋友們不僅在校內(nèi)，也會在校外交流。

四.主體段③：對比

Also,it is normal that the students feel psychologically more attached to the people in their age group,especially with their friends....